下面是以为同学针对问题“What is an activity that you enjoy doing with your friends and why? Please include specific examples and details in your explanation.”的回答。
There are two reasons why I think so. One reason is that playing sports help us create strong bonds of friendship. It creates many opportunities of cooperation if we have to beat others when play in a group.I don’t like exercising alone. It is really boring if you have to repeat some moves.I am really interested in playing sports with my friends.
第一句是总起句，应该用表起始的连接词，如: in the beginning, in the first place,等等;第二句是第一句的解释，因此可以用that is to say, in other words等等来联系这些关系。表递进的关系，可以用moreover。下面我们来看看修改后的答案。
As far as I am concerned, I really love playing sports with my friends. There are two reasons why I think so. Actually, one reason is that playing sports helps us create strong bonds of friendship. You know, it creates many opportunities of cooperation if we have to beat others when play in a group. Also, I don’t like exercising alone. Because it is really boring if you have to repeat some moves. For these two reasons, I am really interested in playing sports with my friends.
(1)表选择关系或对等关系的连接词：either…or…, neither…nor, or, as well as…, and, both…and…等
(2)表因果关系或对等关系的连接词：therefore, so, as a result, as the result of…, because of, due to…,owing to, thanks to等。
(3)表时间顺序的连接词：the moment, as soon as, at first, then, later, meanwhyle, at the beginning, in the end, before long, for the firs(tsecond…)time, the minute等。
(4)表转折关系的连接词：yet, and yet, but , while, on the contrary, on the other hand, however, at the same time(然而)等。
(5)表解释说明的连接词：that is, that is to say, in other words, such as, for instance, and so on, etc. and the like等。
(6)表递进关系的连接词：not only…but(also), what, s more, what’s worse, besides, in addition, worse still, moreover, above all等。
(7)表示总结的连接词：in a word, on the whole, in short, briefly, in brief, to sum up, in all等。